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Teaser

Cobalt Frost

Captain
Captain
The anniversary of the Battle of Wolf 359, fifty years to the day...

It was gamma shift on Outpost 3312; graveyard shift, in old Earth slang. Lights throughout the outpost were dimmed, and the only people moving around were those assigned to gamma shift and those who couldn't sleep (Sickbay had three reported insomniacs on board). Oh, and last week there'd been a sleepwalker.

And that, thought Lieutenant C'tor (Andorian by birth, though he'd never seen his homeworld), was the most exciting thing to happen on this godsforsaken little tritanium tub in the two Standard years I've been here. He stood up and walked around the outpost's Operations center, affectionately known as 'the Closet' due to its small size and the fact that, like most closets, it was crammed with stuff. Consoles and display monitors, in this case, but still stuff.

The walk around the Closet took less than two minutes, and Lt. C'tor took exactly sixty-seven steps to accomplish his little tour. He'd counted. Several dozen times. The displays showed the space surrounding the outpost: the asteroid belt (97 rocks of various sizes, mostly iron and silicates), the Miller Nebula (which was pretty the first few times, but now, to C'tor anyway, resembled a certain stain on the mess hall rug), and the two ships attached to the outpost. The Defiant-class USS Nighthawk and Akira-class USS Augustus were on station, having recently returned from their patrol route.

Lt. C'tor thought about calling down to the mess hall to see if he could get a sandwich, but it was still early in his shift, so he decided to hold off on that for a while. Another tour around the Closet to examine the various monitors and readouts revealed nothing more than what they'd reported three minutes ago, so C'tor plopped down in front of one of the LCARS terminals and called up his post-Academy correspondence course program. C'tor had graduated with honors from Starfleet Academy, but there was always something more to learn, and the Academy offered post-graduate classes. These classes could be used as credit toward the next promotion, but more often than not were just taken to expand one's personal knowledge.

C'tor was boning up on ancient Earth history, in particular the Chinese. He found it interesting to compare and contrast the Chinese, specifically the dynastic period, to a similar time on Andoria. As the latest assigned reading scrolled across the screen, C'tor found his eyelids getting very heavy. Maybe a five-minute break, he thought, but just as he closed his eyes and took a deep, relaxing breath, every single alarm in the Closet went off. Loudly.

C'tor spun the chair to face the master display, where he saw the Nighthawk and the Augustus moving into defensive positions. He briefly wondered what for, but then the screen flickered at the energies of transwarp conduits -- lots of transwarp conduits -- opening near the asteroids. Space near the outpost was blackened by the arrival of, if the sensors read true, nearly two hundred Borg craft, mostly cubes but with several spheres and a few types never before encountered mixed in. C'tor's throat was suddenly very dry, and the only thing he could think of was a Chinese proverb he'd learned in last month's lesson: May you live in interesting times.

He suddenly remembered his earlier thought about how last week's sleepwalker was the most exciting thing since he'd been here, and his next thought was be careful what you wish for. C'tor also remembered that, interestingly enough, every culture he'd encountered had an expression that translated to exactly that, warning about wishing. Any further thoughts were driven out of his head by the chirp-chirp of an incoming hail. Instead of the metallic chorus that C’tor had heard in vids of previous encounters, the voice of the Borg was something other than harmonious. This time, it was odd, almost.. fractured. Something was obviously different, but how different, C’tor couldn’t begin to imagine. Hesitantly, he pressed the control to engage the comm-channel.

We are the Borg. Lower your shields and power down your weapons. We require.. your assistance. We have come to negotiate.. peace...
 
Wow, you’ve certainly caught my attention with your fantastic teaser! :bolian: Very well written, and I appreciate the small details like the number of steps taken to circumnavigate the operations center and the nebula resembling a stain on the mess hall carpet.

Pray continue, fine sir!
 
Excellent beginning! You caught my attention within one paragraph (and that's unusual for me). You provide excellent detail without being too obvious and create empathy for your character.

Oh, and by the way, the Borg are back, too! :eek::borg:

Great "Teaser!" Now, on to the rest of the story! . . . :borg:
 
Thanks for the comments!! I'm glad my little tidbit was well received. Most of the rest of the story is very much a WIP, scattered across several notebooks, many scraps of paper, and bouncing around my noggin, so I can't say quite when it'll see 'print'. A six-month old baby does keep one fairly busy...

The story will start in Star Trek: Gateway Sector Expeditionary Command (ST: GSEC), continue in either Star Trek: Challenger or Star Trek: Flight of the Challenger (haven't quite decided on the name, but either way it'll abbreviate ST: CHA), and keep going into Star Trek: P.R.O.T.O.T.Y.P.E. (ST: PRO).

Here's another little morsel:

Gabriel threw up his hands in mock disgust. "Sure, why not? What's one more long-gone ancient super-race, who I'm sure left behind mile-long starships with planet-busting lasers and gene-bombs and.." Gabriel noticed that Edison had turned that particular shade of blue that he tended to when he was hesitant to share something. "What is it, Edison?"

"I believe you were trying to be humorous, Captain Frost, but.."

"Tell me there aren't mile-long starships with gene-bombs scattered throughout the galaxy."

"The ships are not quite that long, Captain Frost, perhaps a kilometer and a half, two kilometers at best."

"And the gene-bombs?" Edison shaded blue again...
 
I agree. This is a very interesting premise you've got here. And yeah, a lot of detail in your writing as well. Detail is great but it also slows down the pace a lot, especially if you write in big chunks. Not a big deal with a small teaser like this of course.

And besides your second preview proofs that you handle quick dialogue very well too. All this makes me quite curious to read more. Hopefully you'll get a chance to give is some more soon.
 
fleetcaptain said:
I have a question, is this set aboard the Galaxy class Challenger or another newer Challenger?

The story starts in the early 2500s (I have a date written down somewhere, I just can't remember where at the moment :D). The Challenger will be either Pellucidar-, Godphoenix-, or Ryan-class, depending on a) which design I decide to go with, and b) my actually finishing the designs.

*************
Red alert klaxons were screaming, echoing through every corner of the massive Gateway starbase. Admiral MacAllister swore under her breath. As if I didn't have a headache already... Her fingers danced over the controls of a barely-functioning terminal, managing somehow to coax the main viewscreen back to life. Telemetry from the station's sensors as well as its periphery of WildCARD satellites flooded the viewscreen.

Ensign Lynch spoke up. "The data shows.."

"I can see what the damn data shows!" barked MacAllister, cutting him off. "Are the thermoprotonic mines on-line?"

"Barely. If we can get one to fire, the rest'll go off. But Admiral.."

"What?"

"Challenger is still in the Corridor."

And Erica is on board, she thought, her heart tightening. But I've got no choice. We've got to stop them here.

"Blow the mine."

"Admiral?"

"I said blow it, g*ddammit!" She stepped over to his panel and triggered the code sequence herself. The cold blackness of space near the station erupted in hellfire as the primal energies of the thermoprotonic mines were released...
 
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