Star Trek: A New Age

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  1. PhaserLightShow

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    (sort of spoilers but not for official content)
    I had a thought for this new Star Trek fanfiction series (Star Trek: A New Age). It is about the adventures of the Enterprise-A in an alternate timeline where the Enterprise-B was delayed and this occurs after the 23rd Century portion of Generation.
    It has a new villain race as well. The Authum. A breakaway group from the Romulans (I made this group so I could have people who be the Romulans do stuff that contradicts current Star Trek). Late 23rd century.

    The Crew, USS Enterprise-A:
    Captain Don Madison (Human) - Commanding Officer
    Commander Barex (Romulan) - Science Officer, Executive Officer
    Doctor John Wilson - Chief Medical Officer
    Lieutenant Commander Lee Jansen (Human) - Chief Engineer, Second Officer
    Lieutenant Lucas Williams - Navigator, Weapons Officer, Tactical Officer, Third Officer
    Lieutenant Vance (Andorian) - Security Chief
    Lieutenant (j.g.) Luke Samuel - Helmsman
    Ensign Charlie Samuel - Communications Officer

    Main Villains (on main Authum Battleship)
    Commander Zeta - Commanding Officer
    Subcommander Cretum - Executive Officer, Helmsman, Navigator
    Sergeant Tak - Weapons Officer
    Sublieutenant Velak - Chief Engineer, Second Officer

    Starship Classes [Federation] Allowed -
    Constellation Class (USS Stargazer, USS Hathaway)
    Miranda Class (USS Reliant, USS Saratoga)
    Excelsior Class (USS Excelsior, USS Hood)
    Constitution Refit Class (USS Yorktown)
    Enterprise Class (USS Enterprise)

    Starship Classes [Klingon] Allowed -
    B'rel Class Bird-Of-Prey Scout (K-22)
    K'tinga Class Battle Cruiser (D7M)
    D7 Class Battle Cruiser (D7A)

    Any questions, comments, suggestions?
     
  2. PhaserLightShow

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    Oh, and don't forget about assistant chief engineer on the Enterprise: Lieutenant (j.g.) Sotam!
     
  3. Maurice

    Maurice Snagglepussed Admiral

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    EDITED BECAUSE POINT MOOT DUE TO TOPIC MOVE TO CORRECT FORUM
     
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  4. PhaserLightShow

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    I have moved it. What is your opinion of my ideas, however?
     
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    Correction. I have not: but it is fine here.
     
  6. GSchnitzer

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    Thread moved to fan fiction forum.
     
  7. PhaserLightShow

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    Thank you.
     
  8. PhaserLightShow

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    Oh and any opinions of the ideas I present. I have a first-draft script for the fanfic.
     
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    And if not denoted a person is human.
     
  10. Gibraltar

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    The premise sounds interesting.

    Why don't you present the story here in the fanfic forum?
     
  11. Sgt_G

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    I was going to point you to another topic, "Creating a realistic crew manifest", but I see that you found it. See my comment posted there.

    Based on the above listing, it appears that you subscribe to the Roddenberry view that the entire crew are all Ensigns except for the ten-percent or so who are Lieutenants and above. That's fine. I prefer to have enlisted ranks in the crew. Just pick one way or the other and stick with it.

    As to the list above, I feel that "Lucas Williams", your Third Officer, is wearing too many hats. I'd create two more characters and make them the Weapons Officer and Tactical Officer.

    Can you post a short, three or four paragraph, example of your writing so that we may evaluate your style and creativity?
     
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  12. PhaserLightShow

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    Weapons Officer and Tactical Officer are the same thing, just two different but adaquate names.

    And my fanfic is in script form, but I post some shortly. That said (which may change your parameters), how long would you like what I post to be?
     
  13. PhaserLightShow

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    I will - soon.
     
  14. PhaserLightShow

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    And except for Captain and sometimes First Officer, Number Positions (Second Officer, etc.) overlap with other jobs. As does Navigator. Sulu and Chekov are Helmsman and Navigator, but both are Weapons/Tactical Officers.
     
  15. Sgt_G

    Sgt_G Commodore Commodore

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    Yuck. I find script format very hard to read, especially when it's center-justified. Seriously, I don't understand why some authors favor that style. Unless you're actually planning to do a film / play, why write in that format?
    They're not, really. Roddenberry started that in TNG because he wanted it to be a kinder gentler universe, but he had them as separate jobs in TOS.
    That was on-screen only due to limited budgets and air time, so they didn't bring in another actor.
     
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  16. PhaserLightShow

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    This is meant to be in the transition between TOS Movie and TNG (the Enterprise-A has had an extensive refit). The Federation is not at war (not with the Klingons or Romulans), though, as you should know, I have the Authum Romulan breakaway that occasionally fights the Enterprise. But, in general, this is a kinder/gentler universe where the Federation is largely at peace.
     
  17. PhaserLightShow

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    Care to turn your back on my idea, now, then?
     
  18. Sgt_G

    Sgt_G Commodore Commodore

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    No, I didn't say that. I will read it and give you feedback on whether or not I think the story plot is good. From what you've hinted at, it looks mildly interesting.

    This board is MUCH better than Fan-Fic dot-com, which I gave up reading a long long time ago, but it still gets the occasional drive-by of someone posting poorly written intro segments, either poorly thought out plots and/or poorly written spelling/grammar. I wanted to see three or four paragraphs to get a feel for your style. Just based on your general conversational postings, I do believe you will rise above that kind of drek. Nothing's worse than Trek Drek. So, given that I suspect it won't look like a fourth-grader's writing, I look forward to seeing if the plot is interesting and the characters are believable.

    By the way, on this board, it's considered bad form to break up your replies to multiple thoughts into separate postings, especially back-to-back. Yes, sometimes you'll get an after thought you want to include; we all do that. Unless someone has already replied back or it's a day old post, it's best to use the EDIT function and add it into an existing post.
     
  19. Bry_Sinclair

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    Can I ask, is the crew all male? There doesn't seem to be much in the way of diversity to them either.

    I've written one piece in the script format and found it a very alien way of writing for me. It doesn't really allow for much in-depth character work, what they're thinking, feeling, smelling, struggling with, which is what I (personally) like to get into. Though each to their own.
     
  20. PhaserLightShow

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    Did you see Comm. Officer and New Diplomat Assistant Chief Charlie Samuel (the brother of the Helmsman)?